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The letter by amie689 The letter by amie689
The girls are possibly sisters, brought up by their father since their mother had passed on - the elder sister is prim and responsible but indulgent towards the younger tomboyish sister .. hence she's still on her futon when the sun is up because certainly no Japanese mother would let her daughter laze about when she could be doing chores...

but then again, older one could still be the mother and the younger girl's still in bed because she been unwell..

The father has been away for some time and the letter is from / about him...

So comments and criticisms if you please :D
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Critique by Know-It-Like-A-Poet Jan 18, 2013, 4:08:21 PM
First off, this is an amazing digital painting. I have no real insight on airbrushing since I do not do it myself but as a visual artist in general I’d like to critique this as a composition in general.

The details that probably deserve the most recognition are not figures although they were done very well, but the clothes they are wearing, the furniture and the room itself, for example the wooden cabinet on the far right of the composition and the light glowing behind the door or window just behind the girl on the left’s head and all the shadows in all the right places.

One area that isn’t quite up to the standards as what was mentioned above is the textures of a few things like the swords above the wooden cabinet on the far right and the mattress the girl on the left is lying on. After all the airbrushed paintings I’ve seen, texture has always been an iffy area so it isn’t a big deal. The hair did have excellent texture though.

As for the two girls, they resemble a Disney like style most visible in the shapes of their faces and facial features. They don’t look Japanese at all to be honest. And they don’t have to be but it is one of the first things I noticed when I saw this.

There is a subtle smudge right by the left girl’s hand. It could be a stain when considering the ‘story’ inside this composition’s world. But it seems a little out of place. Another thing that looks a little out of place is the white translucent arcs on the walls. I’m not sure what they represent.

I noticed that the round brown circle on the left side of the door is a little rough looking. That too I am not sure as to what it is, but I just thought I should mention it.

The technique you used to make the kimono hanging on the far left not take up to much attention is impressive.

This painting tells a great story just by capturing one instance. The title was simple and very suiting. I don’t mean to speak for everyone else but I think the most popular thought was that these two girls were reading a letter from someone they knew like a sibling, father, uncle etc. in the military (the samurai swords on hanging above the cabinet gave me that hint).

This was a great composition overall.
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lavenderl Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Very pretty!  What era is this?  It looks like Edo, but maybe it's Meiji?
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amie689 Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much :heart:

I have no idea actually.. I don't think there were many changes in the daily lives of individual common people in Japan.. up till 2nd world war,.. so both is possible, I think.. 

This just started as a random sketch on postures... 

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lavenderl Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome.  I wish my random sketches turned so good. ;)
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DavidJLee Featured By Owner May 14, 2013  Student Photographer
wow great job:)
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amie689 Featured By Owner May 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you very much :D
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DavidJLee Featured By Owner May 14, 2013  Student Photographer
you are very welcome:)
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Miam-Pepin Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013  Student Digital Artist
Nice work
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amie689 Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you :D
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piecees Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
very very amazing work i love it very very much
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amie689 Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
:tighthug:
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piecees Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:)
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Englehart Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2011  Student
So beautiful! I love your warm, soft style. The girl in the yukata looks a bit like Kaoru. :) Ah I just noticed the wonderful kimono in the corner! Such wonderful detail! Awesome job!
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amie689 Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Must have been thinking of Kaoru...can't remember :) but the kimono in the corner was pure whimsy and I got carried away..

Thank you so much :)
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PenWandering Featured By Owner May 30, 2011
Wow, I really like the shading on the walls and floor and the luminosity at the shoji. All the folds and wrikles in the fabric must have taken forever, too. You've done your customary excellent job with skin and hair, too.

One question: if Father is away, why the daisho on the set of drawers? Unless it's a spare or ancestral set.

Anyway, another excellent piece of work. I am once again in awe. :highfive:
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amie689 Featured By Owner May 30, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
:D You're the first to comment on the walls, floor and shoji :D I get finicky about backgrounds because it can really make the character seem out of place..

Good question, about the daisho.. its probably anchestral;
oooorrr...., it was her brother's who had died in an earlier battle .. that's why now the father had to go... :omg:

I do say my imagination really runs with this one...

Thank you :hug:
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PenWandering Featured By Owner May 31, 2011
And I am picky about background because it sets the character(s) in place! I'm always looking at pictures - both traditional art and photography - with "How would I describe this?" going on in my head. But it's really hard to describe the subtleties you paint without going on for paragraphs, which is why the Classics are so hard to read. Writers like the Brontes, Dickens, etc. had to describe everything in minute detail because often the readers had no frame of reference for how the other classes lived. With our lives so saturated by the media now, the frames of reference are easier and we tend to gloss over all that description and get to the action. But when one is writing about another culture, you suddenly find all that description is necessary or the whole thing makes no sense. You've got a great eye for finding the different shades that go with shadows, lighting, and natural variation and bringing them into the picture in just the right places. :)
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amie689 Featured By Owner May 31, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Nice to see you put words for what I do :) It's oddly gratifying :D

I can just manage a 'Thank you' in return :)
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PenWandering Featured By Owner May 31, 2011
And I am picky about background because it sets the character(s) in place! I'm always looking at pictures - both traditional art and photography - with "How would I describe this?" going on in my head. But it's really hard to describe the subtleties you paint without going on for paragraphs, which is why the Classics are so hard to read. Writers like the Brontes, Dickens, etc. had to describe everything in minute detail because often the readers had no frame of reference for how the other classes lived. With our lives so saturated by the media now, the frames of reference are easier and we tend to gloss over all that description and get to the action. But when one is writing about another culture, you suddenly find all that description is necessary or the whole thing makes no sense. You've got a great eye for finding the different shades that go with shadows, lighting, and natural variation and bringing them into the picture in just the right places. :)
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anticia Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2011
WOW, such a detailed and well-done job you did!
My favourite about this picture is their interaction. I really liked your description as well (haha I go for the sister version X3)
And woah..such a wonderful details on the kimono hanging there.. stunning! *___*
All in all it's very inspiring and makes me wanna draw some traditinal Japanese scene too with such pretty lightings and all...
Fav~
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amie689 Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you very much. Glad you like it :) and the description :) its a weakness of mine...must always have a story if possible :)

I was just having fun with kimono patterns when I did the one in the corner but got carried away, by the time I finished I wished it was slightly more central.. but I'd already painted the darn thing in three layers, its kind of hard to move :)

Glad I've inspired you :) look forward to seeing it. You have a lovely gallery :) *going to look some more*
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anticia Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2011
I think it's a great thing! :heart:
I LOVE stories..and i LOOOVE when pictures "tell a story" on their own! *u*
And always interested in what was in the artist's mind when drawing..pr how muc some things are personal.. I'm interested in these things ^^

Uh huh..WOW..it's almost always "pain in the neck" for me with details..It takes GREAT effort for me to make myself to linger more on details.. XD;

Aww I wish I had the time >,<;;;;
First I also would like to fix two kimono pictures I've made..they feel incomplete for me and poorly done. XC
Thanks - I'm glad you liked! :lol:
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amie689 Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
...there is some truth in the saying 'a picture is worth a thousand words' :)

hmmm...the doing details is not work if you love the subject, and and as paint the details you will fall in love with the subject... so the trick is to force yourself through the initial part to find what you love about it, then time just flies :)

and the truth about my paintings... its never finished :) I always go back and touch up :) If the changes are major I may repost, but sometimes I like to see the difference :)
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monstermo Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is pretty amazing : ) wow and only 6 layers??
keep up the great work : )
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amie689 Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you very much :D

..2 for background, skin, hair, clothing and line.. yup :nod:
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monstermo Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Your welcome c:
wow! it takes me like 30 just for my crappy stuff rofl
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amie689 Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
...I'm still envious of those who do it in one.. :)
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monstermo Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Me too D: LMAO!
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siren10101 Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
Maybe the one reading the letter has come across something odd that she hasn't read aloud yet ^^
Did you do this as a matte on the computer?
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amie689 Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
..its possible, isn't it? :) .. we just came upon a scene we're not a part of so, I really have no idea.. :D

I used a computer, yes.. but I'm not sure what you mean by matte..

Wacom intous tablet, and Corel Painter essentials 3, air brush and about 5-6 layers...

Thanks for the comment and faving this, btw :hug:
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siren10101 Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
My sisters always going on about matte and it looks something like this.
We have corel to but i have a preferance for adobe (since it's at hand easy^^)

Your welcome for the fave and comment, oops and da watch XD
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amie689 Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
yes, that too :hug: much appreciated :)
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manic-goose Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2011  Professional General Artist
This is gorgeous, nice still and pensive feeling
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amie689 Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you very much :)
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maggot216 Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2011  Professional Photographer
Maybe the girl or the right is just reading a letter while the one on the futon is simply comforted because it's word from daddy. Not nessesaraly bad news.
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amie689 Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
That's a nice way of looking at it :)
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maggot216 Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2011  Professional Photographer
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amie689 Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
:tighthug:
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redsama Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2011
OMG! It's just wonderful! The background was perfectly done! I really like their face features!
Long time no post and now you posted a great piece! :love:
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amie689 Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you red-chan :) glad you like but I edited the expression..
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redsama Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2011
I see, but the face features are still very beautiful! ^^
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amie689 Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
and I thank you again :hug:
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equigoyle Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Oooh! That's so pretty! You should totally do a story with this! It's so cute! I love the expression on the girl's face. So totally focused on every word! :D
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amie689 Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Just posted the new version - changed the expression to suit the background story. Think its better :P
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equigoyle Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I just saw it! Looks great! :D
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amie689 Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Glad you like :D
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red-winged-angel Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Amazing!!
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amie689 Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you kindly :hug:
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red-winged-angel Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You're welcome, my dear! :aww:
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AngieVX Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2011  Student General Artist
You're quick! And I like the atmosphere of the drawing! As for girls' expressions - I think they're fine and look natural. I love the 'smoky' landscape and light - looks like morning!
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amie689 Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
:D... not really quick... more like obsessive :P I just hate unfinished work.

Thank for the comment, but their expressions are incongruent.. I can't seem to decide between a good news or bad news...
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